“But not for the humans,” said Johannes, “how long do they live? Less than a century? That’s what I’ve been told. The funny little clear things they make will last long after them. There’s beauty in the ephemeral, yes, but they see beauty eternal.”
“‘Special skills’ now is it? That’s a new one.” Matt had been called a consultant, an expert witness, even a confidential informant; anything to avoid the word psychic.
She is independent and rugged (four wheel drive). She's not shy and brassy about what she likes. And when she likes something or someone, there's no question, she goes for it, fights for it. Usually, that's enough to get her way, but if there's a fight, she's up for that, too. She doesn't mind camping and roughing it in the woods of Alaska and canning salmon and being smelly. But she can also pull off a girl gatsby if she has to with a perfectly cut dress and diamonds (borrowed, because she's given all her wealth away). She will stop and help the a person, young and the elderly alike because that's who she is. She puts human beings first. In a material world, she stands apart. That's why she'll probably drive off into the sunset someday, alone.
She will lunge at problems with an enviable focus born of the notion that success builds upon itself and is attractive like a well designed composition.
Ooh this tells us a lot (about the character and the person observing her). A real sense of careful control going on there (which also makes me want to see all that focus and organisation fall apart to see how she copes...)
Sure, I'll give it a try. It's a flash piece and I don't spend much time describing the character, rather, I let the reader from an opinion of him by his actions and words. This dialogue may sum it best:
"Sorry, but being stuck in a wormhole local transfer station playing Go Fish with a Shapeshifter isn’t what I trained for.”
It didn’t matter that Vittoria described him to her girlfriend as “like Little Lord Fauntleroy, but haunted.”
At thirteen, Margo knew she wasn’t pretty but she held out hope.
She was a man's woman.
This is from my FMC's point of view, about my MMC,
"Even if he had had his dark times, he was some sort of moonshine of his own. A light in the darkness."
“But not for the humans,” said Johannes, “how long do they live? Less than a century? That’s what I’ve been told. The funny little clear things they make will last long after them. There’s beauty in the ephemeral, yes, but they see beauty eternal.”
“‘Special skills’ now is it? That’s a new one.” Matt had been called a consultant, an expert witness, even a confidential informant; anything to avoid the word psychic.
As I sat in the office, staring at a selection of bills sitting on my desk and wondering which one to pay, a female voice came from my outer office.
Painfully squinting I saw I was in the drunk tank-again; hung over-again this time with, and couldn’t remember the source, a fat lip.
My kind is close to eternal, so time was always meaningless, there was always only today.
Well, let’s see. He gets drunk and drives a minivan full of kids into a pickup truck with two guys sitting in the bed so… :). Thanks for the comment
She is independent and rugged (four wheel drive). She's not shy and brassy about what she likes. And when she likes something or someone, there's no question, she goes for it, fights for it. Usually, that's enough to get her way, but if there's a fight, she's up for that, too. She doesn't mind camping and roughing it in the woods of Alaska and canning salmon and being smelly. But she can also pull off a girl gatsby if she has to with a perfectly cut dress and diamonds (borrowed, because she's given all her wealth away). She will stop and help the a person, young and the elderly alike because that's who she is. She puts human beings first. In a material world, she stands apart. That's why she'll probably drive off into the sunset someday, alone.
Celeste Dome in the view of another character.
She will lunge at problems with an enviable focus born of the notion that success builds upon itself and is attractive like a well designed composition.
Ooh this tells us a lot (about the character and the person observing her). A real sense of careful control going on there (which also makes me want to see all that focus and organisation fall apart to see how she copes...)
Sure, I'll give it a try. It's a flash piece and I don't spend much time describing the character, rather, I let the reader from an opinion of him by his actions and words. This dialogue may sum it best:
"Sorry, but being stuck in a wormhole local transfer station playing Go Fish with a Shapeshifter isn’t what I trained for.”
Ha! So much worldbuilding in that single sentence. Lovely mix of familiar and speculative. Also makes me want to know what they *did* train for...
Enter Grinnel, an obviously important character as his name is in the title.
Grinnel’s smile is so wide that it almost touches his earlobes. This makes a particularly ugly creature look particularly uglier. Grinnel is a Gnome.
Such an unexpected flip making his smile increase the ugliness. And if the first line is also part of the description I LOVE the fourth-wall break.
I instantly want to now why he is smiling. Great attention grabber.
Makes me want to know what he does with that smile. A smile can hide intent...
“All of a sudden, Aiden felt awkward and out of place in her simple jeans, worn-out sneakers and old coat that had seen too many winters.”
Makes me interested to find out where she is and how she's going to handle the situation...
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Very effective, nicely done.
Thank you ☺️
This Boricua didn't take insults lying down.
Bring it on!
I have the impression of a feisty character, or an action character and I want to know more. The name itself makes me curious.