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Kleopetra Weaves's avatar

To be honest, I like BOTH versions of the story. The original draft is more lyrical, more sentimental, and reads like an emotional cry. The published version (the Pinball machine) is more polished and sharpened, no doubt, but the emotional pull is missing. I could emotionally connect with the Snow Globe version, but not with the published one. I guess, the whole emphasis on movement and plot robbed the story of its original lyrical elements. Plot is good, Pace is welcome, but Pull (emotional pull) is what keeps me invested in a story. I am afraid, I prefer the Snow Globe version over the final one.

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steve chang's avatar

Valid! Tastes are subjective and different readers might be drawn differently to language, emotion, propulsion etc. The beauty of a story is that once it's published, it's no longer ours. The reader takes over. Thanks for checking this out!

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Kleopetra Weaves's avatar

Thank you! What I wanted to say is that 'closure' and 'momentum' are less important to me than an "emotional connect." I do not dispute your logic, though. But I think thumb rules do not apply to literary works. The choice should be left up to the creator / author to decide if their works are supposed to be Snow Globes or Pinball Machines.

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Emma Goldman-Sherman's avatar

This makes a lot of sense, and I love the metaphors of the Snow Globe v. the Pinball Machine. Thank you!

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steve chang's avatar

Thank you for reading! Next week we'll dive into another story type: The Music Box. See you then :)

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